Sunday, January 31, 2010

Teaser: Waiting for the Sky to Fall

Following is a portion of the first chapter of the book I am writing, called "Waiting for the Sky to Fall."  Constructive criticism is always welcome.  This is a story about the transforming power of love, told from the points of view of a mother and her daughter.  The narrator of the first chapter is the mother.


(Currently being edited. New version will be up soon.)

13 comments:

  1. Sharon! That's GOOD!!!

    "These channels contained depths of untold beauty. They were filled with empathy and compassion. She knew sadness, she knew suffering, and could recognize it in others, and could respond. They were filled with the seeds of art, with words and music, which enabled her to engage in the dance of life and love at a level most people her age had no idea existed."

    That is so pretty and well-said!

    How many chapters have you written so far?

    God bless,

    Jen Benjamin

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  2. Just the one chapter so far, Jen. I have other bits of it written in notebooks and in my head, but not put together yet. I now carry a notebook with me wherever I go!

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  3. Sharon - That was some good reading!!! You are very creative and I love how you described your thoughts on love through this chapter. Michaela did inherit some talent from someone.

    I'm thankful to learn about your experience on the risks of loving another.

    My prayers are with you and Michaela,
    Diana

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  4. I recently came across your blog and have been reading along. I thought I would leave my first comment. I don't know what to say except that I have enjoyed reading. Nice blog. I will keep visiting this blog very often.

    Lucy

    http://toddlergirls.net

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  5. That was sooooo deep!!!

    I know I might sound a little immature saying this but seriously. It was just so beautiful my heart actually hurts from reading it. Seriously I'm sitting here and I can feel my heart aching ever so slighltly, literally like its so full. And I'm feeling exhausted, it was almost too good!!. I was in tears when em died and then your descriptions of a mother's love were just so spot on. And so was your description of 'keening', seriously, I've seen people do this at funerals but have never been able to describe it the way you have, its just like pure, raw grief in a sound. Anyway you got me hooked.

    I'm desperate to read Zooey's chapter now!!!!

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  6. Thank you for the beautiful compliment. If I can touch someone's heart with my writing, that is the best I can ask for.

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  7. Sharon, This is a novel, right? fiction?

    It is suspenseful, and creative, and the story is easy to engage. Lot of talent...

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  8. Yes, it is a novel. Fiction. I am really excited about the story I have planned. I just hope I can pull it all together.

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  9. Sharon, I have wanted to write for years, but have been too fearful to share what's inside me so what comes out is flat and safe and meaningless. Thank you for encouraging me with your bravery in always writing from the heart and not being afraid to share it with the world. I take inspiration and courage from reading your heartfelt beautiful words.

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  10. Very well done Sharon then again I didn't expect anything less from you. Can't wait to read what's next. XO DEB

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  11. Oh my gosh this like totally just made me cry! I love it Mrs. Sharon! When will you get it published?

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  12. This was wonderful! I have been writing stories for years but haven't had anything published yet...and I think it's safe to say that if I had something that was written as brilliantly and as deeply heartfelt as this first chapter of yours...I most certainly WOULD be published by now. I was hooked immediately and really want to hear the rest of the story...you must keep writing!

    It's been my longtime observation that it's those who have had to walk the difficult paths of Faith in this life that seem to have the most to offer others through their writing and/or public speaking. Your life experience coupled with heartfelt eloquence in writing has the capacity to touch deep places in a persons heart. You have a wonderful way of articulating your thoughts. Just reading this chapter, I was right there in the scenes, in that little parade to the front door when the officer was on the other side. Wow.

    It's apparent to me after reading your blog these past several weeks and now this chapter, that the Lord has big plans for you through this writing endeavor of yours. Run with it!

    Becky

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  13. Sharon, your writing is so descriptive that I feel like I am in the middle of it all. It is also very powerful and I can feel the raw emotion it has. After you have completed it, you should definitely pitch it to publishers. I enjoyed reading this chapter!

    Radhika

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